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Hush
My tired angel
Just fall asleep and dream
Your thoughts they will untangle
Flowing like a stream

Be silent and don't linger
In this world we live awake
Sleep now forever peacefull
With every wish you make

Just relax in this here after
Sleep tight and do not cry
Let all your dreams care for you
Like a babies lullaby

Make sure you do not worry
Let your thoughts just fly away
Everything is alright here
Your blue skies no longer gray

Your mind will care for you
Destroying all that lie
Like a cloud of white
In a sorry sky

To make yourself feel better
You only need to dream
You only need to think that
Nothings is as it seems

So drift away from this world
Let it carry you along
Ill stay by your side
To make sure nothing goes wrong

You can count on me my angel
I am all you need
To make sure that you make it
To your sleepless dreams
There you go. Sometimes dreams are just better than reality aren't they?
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Anorien- Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2006
oh my god!!!!
im soo watching you this is beautiful!
my boyfriend calls me Angel and this poem is like everything he's said ~^^~

this is wounderfull keep writing ^^!!!!
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Lyfsabitch Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2007
hahah thanks
I have to start writing some more soon
I kinda went into a slump where i didnt feel like writing lol
But im back now
And im glad you liked it :D
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Anorien- Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2007
=D!!!!!!!
yea i have thos times when im just like... i wana write something but i have like writers block and its all like xP
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Anorien- Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2007
xD awsomeee!
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Lyfsabitch Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2007
hahaha your like totally just in my mind...like wow man...wow ;P
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choppersrule Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2006   Photographer
AWWW its so so..... AWWWWW lol ur pro at rymeing *my speeling sucks
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Lyfsabitch Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2006
hahaha thanks....its too bad no one else realizes that ;p
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SaintlyDark Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2006
Wonderful little piece.
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:iconlyfsabitch:
Lyfsabitch Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2006
thanks :D glad you like it!
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Sheltan Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2005   Photographer
An intruiging rhyme scheme and the pacing is great.
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:iconlyfsabitch:
Lyfsabitch Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2005
thank you andy poo! your opinion means a great deal to me! :D lol
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Sheltan Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2005   Photographer
Your welcome, now stop calling me that.
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:iconlyfsabitch:
Lyfsabitch Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2005
I CAN NOT BE SILENCED!
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Lyfsabitch Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2005
hey......
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Sheltan Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2005   Photographer
Haha we know that.
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Knock-out Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2005
gorgeous poem. i love stuff about angels...i kno some of it gets a bit cliche but this is i like
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Lyfsabitch Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2005
Im soo glad you like it! :D
I tried my best not to make it too Cliche! haha
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Knock-out Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2005
thats ok!! tis beautiful
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Lyfsabitch Featured By Owner Oct 24, 2005
Im Happy you think that :excited:
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ESIC Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2005  Professional Traditional Artist
beautiful

i usually dont read the poetry on here
that was nice though
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Lyfsabitch Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2005
Thank you! :D
Im glad you liked i could hcange you mind, enough for you to like it as a favourite!
What do you usually look at? maybe you could giveme some people to check out... some you think i would like anyway! haha
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ESIC Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2005  Professional Traditional Artist
hmmmm

thats tough to pick
id say you would probably like
ashwings
and coey
its a hard to pick from so many amazing artists

oh wait.....

noyeah
oh my head

oh snap
:ambulance:

no yeah
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Lyfsabitch Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2005
I see maybe i should try them! I think i will!
thanks for the new people to check hahah

:O
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Lyfsabitch Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2005
I see maybe i should try them! I think i will!
thanks for the new people to check hahah

:O
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BlackFeatherz29 Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2005  Hobbyist General Artist
Very cool. I like depressing poetry and art...

Hey, if you have time, check out my FF.net profile page, cuz I have a lot of depressing Fullmetal Alchemist poetry on there. It's listed as my homepage.

Angsty poetry rules!
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Lyfsabitch Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2005
sure ill check it out!
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BlackFeatherz29 Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2005  Hobbyist General Artist
Arigato!
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Lyfsabitch Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2005
very welcome! haha
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BlackFeatherz29 Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2005  Hobbyist General Artist
More quotes!

Make it idiot proof and someone will make a better idiot.
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Lyfsabitch Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2005
hahah cool!
Just keep bringing them on.... i could always use more quotes!
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BlackFeatherz29 Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2005  Hobbyist General Artist
My greatest fear in life is that no-one will remember me after I'm dead. - some dead guy
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Lyfsabitch Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2005
:P cool
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SpokenAubade Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2005
I noticed two spelling mistakes (Peaceful and destroyed), Were they deliberate?

When I read this, it sounded more like a song than a poem. A poem, to me is something that explodes with meaning. That shares it's message through details, specific images. It doesn't merely tell us that you'll "stay by [our] side", it makes it an experience, complete with images, sounds, and rhythm, in tight, concise lines.

Don't keep this night candle flame hidden in your cupped hands, it's warmth and light shielded from us.

I love it when poetry appeals to the senses; gives specifics, details and all for what? Intensity.

Open our eyes to the graceful wings of your imagination; make us long to fly away in the verse. Therefore, go beyond; don't slide off poems that read like general statements, whether rhymed or not.

The easy way out is to say that the reader isn't looking deep enough or to rationalize that the reader should simply get whatever they want when reading the poem.

I would rather be swept away.


~Aubade
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Lyfsabitch Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2005
No i don't believe that the spelling was intentional! Somtimes i forget to go back through the poem haha, i type to fast for my own good! hah
And im glad you see somthing when you read my peom...(s) I alwasy try to make it able to be visualized whilest somone is reading it!
I enjoy the effect fo being able to see the peom apear in yours (or somone elses) mind, gives the poems more of an apeal andmroe meaning then just words on a page!
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SpokenAubade Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2005
I think you misunderstood my comment. It's completely my fault.

When I said it sounded more like a song than a poem, I meant that it lacked the exact language and explosive power of verse. It, like many of the songs I hear, delt with generalities that evoke images in the reader simply because the reader wants them to be and imagines them to be. "A sorry sky", for example, has images attached to it only when the reader want's it to and because it's an almost cliche. In a poem, on the other hand each word is packed with meaning and hand picked to be as precise and powerful as possible. Taste touch sight smell and all the senses are often engaged...

I'm sorry I wasn't clear.
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Lyfsabitch Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2005
Haha thats okay!
I also think it kinda sounds like a song myself, lots of my poems sound like songs! ahaha
But i hope you still liked it...none the less!
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SpokenAubade Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2005
Oh, I had liked it. Just in a different way. :)
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Lyfsabitch Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2005
good good! as long as you liked it!
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Free-Fall Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2005
Its good, I really like the title, I read it and an idea for a poem popped into my head, your work is inspirational to me
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Free-Fall Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2005
:ninjabattle: I figured I'd slip that in there as to not sound so serious
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Lyfsabitch Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2005
hahaha
trust kayla to not want to sound serious!
And don't worry i pictured ypu saying it in the weird voice you do when you are "fake serious" hahah
and im glad I inspire you..... you have to tell me your idea! even when i was reading the title it gave me more ideas to write about haha i inspire myself...somtimes to do evil.. evil things which we will not talk about.... at least not here! haha
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nakedlies Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2005
That's beautiful.
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Lyfsabitch Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2005
thank you... your beautiful! haha
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nakedlies Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2005
Thanks!
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Lyfsabitch Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2005
very welcome
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Khipmunk Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2005
I like it. I don't think it needs to be changed. =D
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Lyfsabitch Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2005
thanks i actualy changed it a little while typing it up! I don't think it need changes anymore.... but if it doesn't hurt!
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Khipmunk Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2005
True. I can't see any changes that need to be made. Except for typos.
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Lyfsabitch Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2005
yeah i type fast and forget to go back and check the errors... then i get to lazy to go through it after i mad it... hahaha
:D
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Khipmunk Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2005
"after i mad it" and there's the point proved. =D
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